Making
Your Writing Specific!
Advanced Composition classes wrote a description
of a place—either a favourite or a disliked one. Using specific
words brought their descriptions to life.
Student Examples
The daytime is good, but, at night, there are no
lights on the streets, a lot of mosquitoes, the whoop of baboons
and the roar of the lions.
In this example we changed "animal noises" to
include the sounds of baboons and lions. Note how much more
interesting it is to know the specific, African, animals. [teacher
comment]
That is the messiest room in my house. When I
open the door, I could see their dirty underwear, filthy socks,
and stinky shoes were thrown everywhere.
When a simple word will communicate your
message, choose it. Do not seek fancy synonyms unless the word is
not communicating your message. We changed "clothes" to "dirty
underwear, filthy socks, and stinky shoes" and have used parallel
structure in our list. [teacher comment]
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